Andrea Dayla is a college girl living off-campus near Dartmouth College in Hanover, New Hampshire. The homeowner, an old (literally) family friend of her Uncle, has decided to move to Florida and left her furnished house for Andrea to live in while Andrea attends college. An orphan whose parents were killed in “a mugging gone bad” while her mother was pregnant with her, Andrea was raised by her Uncle Greg in Hot Springs, Arkansas. Andrea comes to believe that Hanover is populated with a few vampires. In addition, she learns there is a change that will take place around her twentieth birthday, one that has to do with the vampires, her legacy, her future and if the story of her parents’ death is the truth.
It was apparent within the first few pages that the author has a very difficult time with spelling. I tried to ignore it, but it was incredibly distracting. There were multiple misspellings and typos per page. In some cases, a word that was close enough was used, i.e. “since” instead of “sense,” “fill” instead of “feel.” Grammar is not the author’s forté, either; I had to read some sentences two or three times because I could not understand the meaning due to dangling modifiers, run-on sentences, sentence fragments, and the like. Many commas were mislaid and the number of times there were misplaced apostrophes was overwhelming. Even well-known sayings were slightly off kilter (“think of the devil” and “the less of two evils”). It’s like the author learned English from hearing it through a glass pressed to the wall.
For the record, I did try to push through all of the mistakes because I thought: “If the story is good, an efficient editor can take care of the rest.” Unfortunately, though I forced myself to continue, I had to throw in the towel and cry UNCLE around page 147. This tale is over-saturated with Drama. Characters flare up and cool down as quickly as they contradict something they just said or did. The foreshadowing is like getting hit over the head many times with a skillet; it seems like all action in the story is crucial to the plot. Descriptions about things not essential to the plot are often chronicled in extreme detail while those that are more important are ignored. Relationships are formed immediately, so they lack authenticity.
The final nail in the coffin, however, was the eBook’s resemblance to a certain vampire story that has been very popular for the last few years. Certainly, these New Hampshire vampires are based on the opposite coast from Forks, Washington, but there are too many similarities between the two clans to ignore. For example: they go camping every other weekend, one can read thoughts, one can see into the future, the “children” are all adopted by a doctor who doesn’t look much older than the “kids,” there’s a reference to a human woman getting pregnant by a vampire and the horrible birth she endured, one boy was about to get killed by a mountain lion but was “saved” by another vampire, there’s an Indian tribe nearby that shape-shifts into wolves, Andrea’s love interest has never fallen for anyone until now, he watches Andrea when she sleeps, their house is so awesome…I could go on and on. Oops, I guess I already did. All that remains for me to do is to find Jasper and have him improve my mood.
1 out of 5 Stars
Believe (New England Immortals #1) by E. Leighanne Grimm-Weever was published March 2, 2012 on Smashwords.com. A free copy of this book was received by Ink and Page in return for an honest review.